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家园 挺不错的了。

要是吹毛求疵crafting,这一段可能有点小问题。

With four years of experience as an R&D manager and director in XXX industry, I have lead a team to launch eight products to the market and increased revenue by 15% on a yearly basis. I believe my proven track record of success combined with an updated technical skill set would make me a strong candidate for the position.

1. with four years of experience,指用experience来干什么,拉队伍研发8个新产品是利用自己已经有的four years of experience,还是过去四年里我带队研发8个新产品,获取了experience? 如果是后者,不妨试一试下面这句,不过我个人觉得有点太文绉绉了。

Being an R&D manager and director in XXX industry for four years, I have led a team to launch eight products to the market...

2.increase 和谁并列?这是你朋友发出的动作(那是和led并列)还是他领导的小组发出的动作(launch)?不过这是小问题,一看大家都明白。

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