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主题:【求助】写了一封离职告别信,高手们帮我把把关! -- DF41

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家园 兄弟这个不是辞职信啊,而是告别信。而且也过长、过细了

俺没细看,但估计你是准备作为email弄群发的

无论是辞职信(resignation letter, 给supervisor or senior management的),还是告别信(farewell letter, 给coworkers的),都绝对绝对不宜写的这么长。前者是官面文章,自然没必要写得过长过细,而后者的受众(audience)很广,跨越各部门、不同级别/阶层、包括与你私交较深的和泛泛之交的,弄的过长了,会让所有人--无论是私交深厚的还是一面之交的,都感到别扭。

而且切切不要elaborate on your new position or career. 诸如神马 "...another company which will afford me the opportunity for better personal growth and professional development"。这个话是大忌,会让人觉得你有炫耀甚至觉得自己攀了高枝儿之意,虽然你本来完全不是这个意思。

还有些小语法瑕疵,比如 you may already known

应该是you may have already known,或者you may already know. 后者更简捷。这种东西,simplicity is the King.

其他语法瑕疵就不一一说明了。

我见过的所有老美的辞职信都很简捷,如果想加入一些个人情感因素,可以这样写:

Dear All,

It is with mixed emotions that I'm writing this email message. As some of you know, I have accepted a position at another company,and January 25 will be my last day with XXX. It was not an easy decision for me, as I truly enjoy working with all of you here at [Current Company].

I would like to take this opportunity to thank you all, my friends and colleagues, for your support and friendship. It's been such a pleasure and privilege to work with each of you! I will miss you all... (俺觉得俺已经写的够酸够酸的了,如果你嫌酸的话可以适当tone down一下,但却不可比这个更酸了)

I can be reached at my personal email address ([email protected]) or at my cell, 250-250-3838.

Keep in touch and all my best wishes to you.

Wada Wada

最后,你的special thanks to xxx team 那段,不要放在这个给所有同事的电邮里,而是在这个电邮发出之后,再给那个部门的所有同事单独追发一个。

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